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Old 12th January 2013
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New to portraits

any thoughts on this. It is a test shot prior to trying to get some decent head shots for Tom (the model) who is a talented young actor.



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Like that...is the sitter happy?
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Re: New to portraits

I am no expert at portraits so I speak purely from a novice point of view.

Is the image for him to use as a publicity shot? If so I think it is a very good representation, showing all the detail which would be required for such a shot.

I do feel that I would like to see a bit more of his shoulders, he looks a bit truncated and somehow the lighting does not seem quite right, perhaps a bit too harsh on one side. Having said that I would be very happy to have taken the shot, what does he think?
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Re: New to portraits

Did you take one in portrait orientation as well?
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Re: New to portraits

Tom is a great young actor, he recently landed a part and performed in Les Mis at our biggest regional theatre.

As a teenager (actually I have no idea how old he is, maybe 11) he has no interest in being in front of a camera!

As he has real talent he wants some head shots for a portfolio, it is a genuine possibility that he could make a go of this.

The above shot is a snapshot taken with my new background (first attempt with it), I would appreciate any comments no matter how brutal, we plan (his dad is a good mate of mine) on taking the "real thing" soon.
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Re: New to portraits

@David

It is a crop from a portrait orientation
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Re: New to portraits

Not sure what the experts think of this, but I would let him turn his chest just a little bit towards the camera and avoid this full lateral stance. If I had a spot light, I would try back lighting his head from the below, to give his hair a contur line.
Great detail and DOF as is - IMHO.
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Re: New to portraits

As that's a crop from portrait I'd go in tighter in portrait orientation.
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I like the B/W treatment and lighting, agree with David M and Falk.
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Re: New to portraits

If it is your first attempt at portrait photography then you have done well.

But If I'm to be honest and give a real critique as asked for then for me it looks all wrong.

The angle of the head looks awkward, the shoulder is turned to much towards the camera for a male portrait which is also creating creases in the kneck.

The mouth looks tight and awkward and you need to get him to relax, after all posing is just acting for the camera.

I also think it is overlit on the main plane of the face and you are nearly losing the hair against the black background, so if you light it correctly you will need to use a hair light or reflector to seperate the hair from the background.
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Re: New to portraits

Thanks for the tips, plenty to think about for the next attempt.
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Re: New to portraits

Hi Nigel, I have produced a few First Actor Portfolio images. I thought about what I would want to see if "Casting for Auditions".

Given that Acting is all about ALL Apart from the standard head & shoulders and full length shots, of the Actor as is, I include some "acting shots".

I schedule 2 hours and 3 outfits to produce
1) Youth, modern and vintage (both often in "Emo" and "Aggressive" pose)
2) Now; as a Schoolboy (sporty Teenand as a Teenager student with book)
3) AGED up (to appear 18-20 drinking/smoking - hair re styled & mascara/liner)



If you look on my gallery at 90 per screen and page 14

http://e-group.uk.net/gallery/showga...14/ppuser/1840

you can see a little of what I mean - in capturing the "expression" - which I am reliably informed is KEY to getting invited to Casting Auditions and reflects the ability to act

Have FUN ! I lurve doing these for the Winchester Art Students

ps these were my early set and first use of lighting set and this Student is now at Cardiff Uni and working with Merlin the actor
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Re: New to portraits

I think this is a great shot....I'm new and learning about studio portraits too and therefore I find it difficult to fault it.....I'm still impressed by the simple quality of light and detail.
Thanks for the post and comments.
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Re: New to portraits

Thanks for those Chevvy, more ideas.

TBH my "black background did not come out completely black on this one but was easily corrected in photoshop as it was nearly there.
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