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Walking the Dog

This is the first time I have put one of my model photos in this area scary stuff

I had a fantastic opportunity last month to work with a professional model and designer and this is my favourite photo from the shoot

Taken on e5 with 12-60mm and FL-50R off camera at the old Exide Batteries Plant in Pontypool, South Wales

The dog was actually the designers dog, who just brought her along so not to leave her at home, but I thought it could be a cracking photo to include her Whilst taking this shot, she did pull the model over quite a few times

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Re: Walking the Dog

Scary picture!

My suggestion for what it's worth: The tiles, the clothes and the model's skin tone are all too similar in colour.

I would try turning the background monochrome and leaving model, clothes and dog in colour. It may pull the eye away from the background towards the model.. Maybe?

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Re: Walking the Dog

Thanks Pete, yes a strange look is what I wanted

The original colours would have done just that as the colours of the skin and dog was different to the background, but in this case I wanted to try a different type of processing effect.

I'll upload the original later to compare
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The picture is definitely scary but I really like it. The dog looks amazing.
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Re: Walking the Dog

The background and skintone being subtley similar serves to accentuate the sensuousness of the pose and costume, the dog straining at the leash creates a powerful tension and the derelict set adds a bizarre twist to the image.

A fantastic and daring concept, Steve.
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Re: Walking the Dog

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The background and skintone being subtley similar serves to accentuate the sensuousness of the pose and costume, the dog straining at the leash creates a powerful tension and the derelict set adds a bizarre twist to the image.

A fantastic and daring concept, Steve.
Thanks very much Mark, im trying to come up with different looks lately and glad this has come across to you in this photo
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Re: Walking the Dog

Steve, I keep coming back to this.

I'm no dog lover but I put that aside because I think the image is highly original and has retina lingering impact. This is one of very few pictures posted to forum that has genuinely impressed me with its ingenuity.
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Steve, I keep coming back to this.

I'm no dog lover but I put that aside because I think the image is highly original and has retina lingering impact. This is one of very few pictures posted to forum that has genuinely impressed me with its ingenuity.
Wow, thanks Mark, coming from someone with your talent and experience that's a highly valued compliment, thanks very much indeed
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Re: Walking the Dog

Works for me Steve and you have handled it really well including the processing, I absolutely love the concept!

Just a suggestion but for me the brightest part of the image and a eye drawer is the window, so perhaps a crop even though it places the Rottie at the edge of the frame might work, or alternatvley clone in some of the tiled wall there, just a idea.
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Works for me Steve and you have handled it really well including the processing, I absolutely love the concept!

Just a suggestion but for me the brightest part of the image and a eye drawer is the window, so perhaps a crop even though it places the Rottie at the edge of the frame might work, or alternatvley clone in some of the tiled wall there, just a idea.
Thanks Paul, yes that was one thing that bugged me, I didnt want to crop the photo, but didnt think to clone something in at the time, thanks for the idea
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Re: Walking the Dog

Absolutely love this. Humourous, slightly scary, original. Not your average dog-walker (although there is something suspect about rottie owners ).

I agree the window is a tad disturbing, but cropping it is maybe too drastic, and the dog needs a little room in front. Can you lower the brightness of the window selectively in some way? That might help.
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Absolutely love this. Humourous, slightly scary, original. Not your average dog-walker (although there is something suspect about rottie owners ).

I agree the window is a tad disturbing, but cropping it is maybe too drastic, and the dog needs a little room in front. Can you lower the brightness of the window selectively in some way? That might help.
Ha ha thank you, I'm glad you like it, I agree I don't really want to crop the photo, but cloning in some of the bricks over the window should do the trick
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I could see this being used as an advert! It certainly "gets attention" and could provide a very strong message !

I love the TWIST on the models stomach six pack muscles - which proves the dog is pulling her ! and her awkward gangly pose

I feel it is a masterful, creative composition; unique and unusual; inspiring much discussion regarding all elements.

It is difficult for one to offer "improvement" advice, as we do not know your planned outcome and I suspect THIS IS IT ! Be pleased, be very pleased!
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I could see this being used as an advert! It certainly "gets attention" and could provide a very strong message !

I love the TWIST on the models stomach six pack muscles - which proves the dog is pulling her ! and her awkward gangly pose

I feel it is a masterful, creative composition; unique and unusual; inspiring much discussion regarding all elements.

It is difficult for one to offer "improvement" advice, as we do not know your planned outcome and I suspect THIS IS IT ! Be pleased, be very pleased!
Oh wow thanks ever so much for such lovely comments. I'm glad it has come across in the photo as the dog was really pulling her and it took about 10 shots to get it the way I wanted, within this time the poor girl was pulled in all directions

I am happy with the outcome, but I agree with everyone that the window can be a distraction and wish i cloned it out
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I actually like how all the colours blend together, and I like them being so delicate against the strong subject/message.
The dog's face looks a bit out of focus (sharpened a bit in pp), am I wrong?

Amazing photo anyway! Well done!
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