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I would like an opinion of this portrait, please.
It was shot using my studio lighting etc, and converted to mono and cropped.
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Re: Portrait 1

Classic portrait composition

http://www.ski.org/CWTyler_lab/CWTyl...eCentering.pdf

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Fibonacci composition

http://digital-photography-school.co...s-on-steroids/

The argument has raged from the dawn of "Art", but what really counts is your own opinion. I produce images that I like and if others appreciate them, that's a bonus.

However the crop of the RHS of the image so close to the side of the head, for me spoils the end result. Just a little bit of of a gap would have removed the distraction of the crop and given the subject more presence in the frame.

Rendering the person and the attitude, emotion or personality is always important in portraiture, so without being given the "story" behind the image, we are let to make up our own "meaning" that the image conveys.

The use of clear space is often used for editorial style compositions, allowing for the insert of words or inset pictures.

Can you tell us more about your ideas for this picture ?
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Re: Portrait 1

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Classic portrait composition

http://www.ski.org/CWTyler_lab/CWTyl...eCentering.pdf

Vs

Fibonacci composition

http://digital-photography-school.co...s-on-steroids/

The argument has raged from the dawn of "Art", but what really counts is your own opinion. I produce images that I like and if others appreciate them, that's a bonus.

However the crop of the RHS of the image so close to the side of the head, for me spoils the end result. Just a little bit of of a gap would have removed the distraction of the crop and given the subject more presence in the frame.

Rendering the person and the attitude, emotion or personality is always important in portraiture, so without being given the "story" behind the image, we are let to make up our own "meaning" that the image conveys.

The use of clear space is often used for editorial style compositions, allowing for the insert of words or inset pictures.

Can you tell us more about your ideas for this picture ?
I aimed to represent the subject's character. a) he is partially sighted (though, in fact, a photographer) b) he has a robust, but somewhat off-beat sense of humour.
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Re: Portrait 1

Negative space is often an effective compositional technique in portraiture but here it doesn't seem to relate to the subject and makes the forehead cropped by the edge of the frame look all the more uncomfortable. Of course, you may have been aiming for this type of discord or tension, in which case it suceeds.
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