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Old 5th July 2011
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Lady with bag.

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Re: Lady with bag.

Not your average bag lady

Nice shot and a very good idea. I like the stripes in the pavement, and would have liked to see more of them and less of the sky. I'm not quite sure whether the shadow of the lamp post is disturbing. The lines from the pavement could have been used more as a dynamic element leading up to the lady. But overall a very nice shot!
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Re: Lady with bag.

Nice composition and idea.

Pity the face seems to be turned slightly seawards, to my eyes it looks a little odd with no profile features to give it more shape.

Might also be worthwhile to give it more of a letterbox shape, losing equal amounts of foreground and sky.

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Re: Lady with bag.

That could work well. How much would you crop, Nick? I'd take off quite a bit. That way the horizontal lines take over from the pavement "stripes" in focus, and she would take over more.
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Re: Lady with bag.

I agree with the other comments and I would like to see more exaggeration of perspective if possible, using the wider end of the zoom and perhaps moving a little closer would do it. Yes the shadow of the lamppost is a distraction and, I hate to say it, but so is the plastic bag. Otherwise I love the subject and the idea - food for thought!

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Re: Lady with bag.

I think I'd take a little off the top and bottom to emphasise the shape of the shot and, if you have enough to crop, "move" her slightly to the left.
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Re: Lady with bag.

It's great. I'd play around with extreme elongated letterbox too.
It reminds me a Hockney painting - love it.
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