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Chiswick photowalk image

I'd be really grateful for constructive criticism of an image I took at last month's Rob Pugh Chiswick photowalk. I'm unusually undecided about this - whether to use it and exactly how to present it.

I've done a bit of work on it, tidying up a couple of shadows, and here are two options for crops (but I'd be grateful for comments on all aspects, not just the crops). I have some views on these, but I'll keep quiet for the moment since I don't want to 'lead' anyone.

I'd probably use a title like "The cool wall".

This is for one of my 3 entries in our local camera club's 'new member' competition, so it will be a projected image (so one's more after impact and feel than the technical perfection that would be necessary in a print).

Option 1:
Red cool by drmarkf, on Flickr

Option 2:
mfarrington_The Cool Wall_1 by drmarkf, on Flickr

E-M1 with 35-100.

Any thoughts will be much appreciated.
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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

No2 for me but if its for projection I'd tend to punch it up a bit.

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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

I'd be tempted to really focus on the main subject and crop right in

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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

I think I'd crop just to the right of the shadow of the post. And as Paul said, increase sat a bit.

Quite a punchy image.
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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

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Option 2 for me, but OlyPaul's rendition is very good. I like the shadow of the post included to add interest and the wider view adds context. It's art so there's no right answer, just personal thoughts.

Edit, is there something going on at the intersection of the walls, did you remove something? If that's the remnant could it be cleaned up at all? I think it's a smashing shot, one I would be chuffed about. Well done indeed.
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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

My preference is the first one, I think the bollard on the right balances the image although a touch of PP would help - I'd be tempted to see what happens if you drop the vibrance right down (should you have Lightroom).

Great image though.
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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

For me, the strong colour fights the composition. I'd go monochrome with this one:



Haven't fiddled with the framing, but I think in monochrome it perhaps doesn't need to be cropped so much.

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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

Wow. Many thanks indeed - lots of good ideas to think about and this will help a lot.

We're away visiting friends in Scotland this week, but I'll come back to this fresh after the Bank Holiday and decide which way I'm going to go.
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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

Well didn't think I'd say so but I prefer Jon's B&W version. The way it brings out the texture seems to just knit the whole shot together better.
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Re: Chiswick photowalk image

Yes, I'm going to go with a mono conversion. I like colour in street images when it adds something, but I agree it takes away from the total impact here.

I'm still a bit torn about where to crop laterally, but I'll decide one way or the other - I'm also considering re-instating the two shadows above the wall, but I'll make that decision after converting. Cloning and healing before a mono conversion can lead to some very odd effects in the final image.

Many thanks indeed for all the input: I'll let you know if the judge has any constructive comments. It's one of the club's best judges, so I'm sure he'll be worth listening to: just lately we've had some right p######s judging various competitions in the club, but not this time!
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