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Ballet

Good evening all,

I'd love some feedback on the images below. Which do you prefer and how could they be improved?

Any feedback appreciated.

George

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Re: Ballet

George I prefer the second shot as you have included a bit more of her leg and it gives a more delicate feel to the composition. I think you could increase the contrast too to good effect.
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Re: Ballet

Thanks Phil. I'll have a look at the contrast.
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Re: Ballet

I think they are both good studies. I second Phil's comment that having more of her leg in the second gives a better composition, but I think the positioning in the frame is not quite right. She is close to the left edge with space on the right, but looks as if she is moving left. It would read better if she had space to move into, or, if she is pirouetting, was more central.

I disagree with Phil about wanting more contrast. If you adjusted everything to be "correct" it would look pretty ordinary. It would be interesting to try making them lighter and more ethereal - keep the darks where they are but move the light parts up.

It's an interesting subject and this looks like a good start. I look forward to seeing where you can go with it.

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Re: Ballet

I agree with John on No 2: too far to the left. High key suits the subject, but the shadows aren't right in No 1. They fit better in No 2, and the feet being less foreshortened is also better. The head on view in No 1 makes the feet look clumsy, whereas they look elegant in No 2.

I'd be inclined to try different angles for the feet, and see which looks best. The important thing with 'ballet feet' is that they must look slim and elegant.

Interesting, different subject.
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Re: Ballet

Not that I know anything about ballet, but No 1 does not look like a ballet position and somehow just does not look right for ballet whereas No 2 does, and looks more elegant too. I think I would add a little contrast as well.
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Re: Ballet

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George I prefer the second shot as you have included a bit more of her leg and it gives a more delicate feel to the composition. I think you could increase the contrast too to good effect.
I think there is enough contrast myself in fact the I the shadows on the right of the first need lifted to remove them and the legs on the second need to be lightened also. So i suppose less contrast is needed IMO.

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