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Old 25th October 2017
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Blurred swans...

This morning photo from just after dawn.

I can't make my mind up

Is it just a blurry mess

or

Does it capture the drama of the movement?



E-M1ii, 40-150 f2.8 +MC14,
1/50s, f4.0, ISO 1250

The photo came out very blue - all the photos I took were miles out on WB, but correctable in LR.
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Re: Blurred swans...

Just for fun, I changed the processing to make it a 1950's newspaper photo style...

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Re: Blurred swans...

Too many blurry swans to work, IMHO. I think you needed higher ISO. Or less alcohol.....
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Re: Blurred swans...

I think you need more blurring of movement of the swans, itís worth experimenting more.

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Re: Blurred swans...

Like - strange how the yellow in the beaks centre and to the upper right seem in focussssss
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Re: Blurred swans...

I'll go against the grain - I think it works well, and the original works better than the B&W conversion. I wonder whether an intermediate treatment, with less saturation and possibly more contrast, might work even better.

Ah well, everyone has gout as the French say.

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Re: Blurred swans...

I agree with John, it works for me. Although I'd crop off some of the rhs to get rid of the birds to right of the one in the centre. That in focus beak on the far right I find too distracting.
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Re: Blurred swans...

The colour version works for me although I'd take a strip off the top and bottom to make it more letterbox format. I'd also clone out the diamond shaped highlight on the bank behind the birds and try warming it up a bit more.
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Re: Blurred swans...

Another positive here.

As long as that one swan was focused and reasonable sharp, the piicie works well for me.

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Re: Blurred swans...

I like it (the colour version). The blur obviously gives an impression of movement and the central swan is sharp enough to make it interesting. Let the presses roll!
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Re: Blurred swans...

Many thanks for all the comments, now I've sobered up a bit, I've made a couple of changes as suggested and I think it's improved the picture a bit - so thanks again!

Before and after...





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Re: Blurred swans...

Yep much better.
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Re: Blurred swans...

Not sure - Think would have preferred RH Yellow Beak left in to give better Beak distribution L/C/R. Certainly good to get rid of bottom strip. Also Bank Diamond seemed to give it more balance. Still like.
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Re: Blurred swans...

I'm inclined to think there are just too many swans for it to work well. And one of 'em is standing at the back looking the other way!

If it were me doing that, I think I would like either rather more blur, or rather less blur of the OOF ones; as it is, I feel that it isn't one thing or the other, sort of. Difficult subject, when you have little time to focus and grab the shot.
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Re: Blurred swans...

I think it works pretty well but would have preferred:
1) Fewer swans
2) That central swan to be completely clear of swans further back
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