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Re: Some of my portraits...

Perhaps this one is...

But this one is for sure, a contextualised one !

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Re: Some of my portraits...

They all look good to me Antonio

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Re: Some of my portraits...

Looking for improvement - my suggestions. One or two suggestions for each picture. But first I will state what I really like about each picture.



The first image: I really like the light, her expression, and the colours of the image. However, I feel the image is cropped too tightly on either side - give the headscarf more room, to match the space above her head.


The monk is very engaging, and the eyes sparkle. Mostly good use of natural light, too. But the second has something white in the background coming out of the top of his head like a horn. Maybe clone it out ? The rest of the background is also a bit distracting, so maybe crop SOME of it out, making his face fill more of the frame.


The third one is my favourite (I really like all the others, apart from one). With this one, maybe I'd be asking the impossible, but I would want to see more of the nearest buddah in the glass alcove, rather than little more than the nose-tip. And for the leading lines of the coving and paintwork and standing buddahs to lead me to the sitting woman, rather than the distant buddah ... ?


With the fourth, there is a distracting white blurry something at his eye level - clone or burn ?
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Re: Some of my portraits...

The fifth - a snapshot. Sorry, too many distractions, and all partly-hidden or conflicting with each other.


The final one is very good, too - but might it be better cropping out the woman and baby ? Or did you take another where she had moved ?




If you don't want criticism, though, Beagletorque is correct, then put it in the Foto Fair thread instead :-) I'm not sure I agree with BT on "more context" for some of the shots - I agree that the chap with the turban could do with more context; but not the monk or the woman with the headscarf - the portraits are interesting enough on their own, for me. BUT, if you criticise the criticism, you will not get more suggestions, and will close down discussions which might help you think about which of the suggestions you might like to take on board ...
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Re: Some of my portraits...

My dear... shall I call you "Olympus friends" ? I do not have time to drop you a letter for a couple of weeks, now.
But no doubts, I will be back as I have not erased the email notification. So, I will remember !
Thank you for your opinions. I do appreciate !
See you !
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Re: Some of my portraits...

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Interesting faces, but not really any context. I'm not a fan of the dirty border to highlight the face as it looks unnatural. Nothing wrong with the focus or detail, just slightly boring.

That comment prompted me to look at the hundreds of "Cuba Posts" but for some reason every one of the pages is now blank, ie no photo. Is it just me, a forum fault, or have they now all been deleted ?



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Re: Some of my portraits...

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That comment prompted me to look at the hundreds of "Cuba Posts" but for some reason every one of the pages is now blank, ie no photo. Is it just me, a forum fault, or have they now all been deleted ?



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I think it is a forum issue, many old postes got removed when Ian changed the software, or that is my understanding. I must work out how to change my signature....

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But this one is for sure, a contextualised one !

That is a corker.
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Re: Some of my portraits...

Thank you Darkroom for your kind words.
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"...The first image: I really like the light, her expression, and the colours of the image. However, I feel the image is cropped too tightly on either side - give the headscarf more room, to match the space above her head..."
Thank you. The light is really excellent. I am aware of that. The colours are also quite fine/nice. I would say that this is one of my best portraits and I have plenty of them.
Regarding the crop the only "thing" I think is not as I would like it to be is the cut elbow. However, I also agree that I could have cropped a bit larger. I can't remember how the original image is...

"...The monk is very engaging, and the eyes sparkle. Mostly good use of natural light, too. But the second has something white in the background coming out of the top of his head like a horn. Maybe clone it out ? The rest of the background is also a bit distracting, so maybe crop SOME of it out, making his face fill more of the frame..."
You are absolutely right regarding the "horn". I have not thought about the background of this portrait but I agree with you. Sometimes we do not have time or/and space to fix everything. Well... just a poor excuse for a failure !

"...The third one is my favourite (I really like all the others, apart from one). With this one, maybe I'd be asking the impossible, but I would want to see more of the nearest buddha in the glass alcove, rather than little more than the nose-tip. And for the leading lines of the coving and paintwork and standing buddhas to lead me to the sitting woman, rather than the distant buddha ... ?"
Oh well... I have not seen the Buddha in the glass alcove until... now ! Shame on me !
When taking this photograph - which is the merge of 3 bracketed shots - I was pretty concentrated in the composition. I do have another set of 3 but with a different angle and perspective. What I do not like in this image is the hand of the first statue coming out in that place ! See what I mean ?

"...With the fourth, there is a distracting white blurry something at his eye level - clone or burn ?..."
It doesn't bother me... perhaps I should have made it lighter...

"...The fifth - a snapshot. Sorry, too many distractions, and all partly-hidden or conflicting with each other.
The final one is very good, too - but might it be better cropping out the woman and baby ? Or did you take another where she had moved ?...
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The fifth is a snapshot, yes. Simple. Agree.
The last one - the guy navigating the boat - is also a bracketing shot which turned out to be excellent. I do like it I do not agree with you, as it tells a lot about the live of theses people. The wife and the baby with the father...

Thank you all for the trouble of writing and criticising my images.
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Re: Some of my portraits...

Wide angle portrait !

And "classical" 150mm



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Re: Some of my portraits...

I can't decide about the first shot, it just looks a bit 'odd' to me.

Really like the second one. Nice soft light and the pose is great. A little bit more of her right shoulder in the shot would have been more pleasing to my eye, but still a lovely shot.
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In fact DekHog, the first photograph is very, very spontaneous.
I asked the guy to pose, he moved in that position and I made 3 photographs. One is good. The others I erased as she had the eyes closed and the 3.ed I don't remember.

I think it is a very spontaneous capture which portraits the couple somehow inserting them socially.

Thank you for commenting DekHog !

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Re: Some of my portraits...

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Great Photo Antonio. Classic portrait with good lighting
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Thank you Kevin !
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