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Does this work or not?

Can't decide if this shot of Curbar Edge works like this or not. What do you guys think?

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Re: Does this work or not?

Not sure Phil.Maybe a bit more colour, warmer?
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Re: Does this work or not?

I find the foreground rock blocks to much of the view for my liking.
Shooting for a slightly higher viewpoint (step ladder?) might improve this while still keeping the reedy plant (which works really well).
Another option might be just to have some extra subject matter (a person or dog?) on the rock to break up the large expanse...
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Re: Does this work or not?

There is a fine view going on behind the rock. Sorry, I would like to see the shot taken a few paces to the left so the rock (looks more like a scar on the earth) is not filling most of the frame.
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Re: Does this work or not?

Agree with those before. Too much rock in the foreground. Actually confused me (easily done) for several seconds. That rock deceived s the perspective..........(if it can do that???)..........
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Re: Does this work or not?

My eye goes straight to the water, which sort of defeats the point of a nice view.
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Re: Does this work or not?

Took me a while to figure out what was going on. I agree that the rock in the foreground is too big. The sky is nice though - I like skies!
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Re: Does this work or not?

How about this as an alternative crop of the original image to reduce the impact of that rock?



And for those who wanted to see over the edge to the right of the previous shot a bit of a quirky shot with the 7.5mm Samyang. I decided not to straighten it out as I quite liked it that way.

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Re: Does this work or not?

Yes both of those are better
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Re: Does this work or not?

Much better. Well done for finding the photo that was hiding in the shot.
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Re: Does this work or not?

Still feel that big rock face lacks perspective. At first I thought I was looking at a scarp face maybe several hundred yards away...............

Maybe a can of John Smith on the edge would give it the required perspective...
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Re: Does this work or not?

Mark it would take quite a few cans of JS to get me near enough to the edge to do that I see what you mean though. As I was there I see the image as a flat rock that I was standing close too. So it's all in context. It's really interesting to get all the other views from just the flat 2D image. Must think about that in future when picking shooting angles. Excellent discussion.
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Re: Does this work or not?

Phill, you could crop the first one a little less on the RHS, so that the pool is a bit more off centre, say about a third of the width off the RHS. But it does work much better cropped.

With the fisheye, it's the problem you always get with wide angle lenses: you lose the sense of scale and perspective relative to the foreground, without something to indicate the scale.
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Re: Does this work or not?

Keith I included the couple standing on the edge in the wind to add a bit of scale but they are a bit too far into the image really to work properly. I also probably need to darken the rocks and lighten the distance or visa versa to make the rocks stand out more from the fields?
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Re: Does this work or not?

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Keith I included the couple standing on the edge in the wind to add a bit of scale but they are a bit too far into the image really to work properly. I also probably need to darken the rocks and lighten the distance or visa versa to make the rocks stand out more from the fields?
I think I'd be inclined to lighten the distance, rather than darken the rocks.
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